Thursday, February 18, 2016

Wallbanger Chapter 16: Porn by way of Sesame Street

Last time in Wallbanger...Simon is single, the world rejoiced, he and Caroline are sorta in a relationship, and they get on the plane to Spain.

Chapter 16

We did it too soon. We should have waited.”

Yeah, my writing-senses are tingling and they are telling me that this about something innocuous and not sex related.

'Well, for starters, you're holding it upside down,' I shot back, grabbing the map and turning it right side up.”

So yeah, the suggestive conversation about doing too soon was about directions and makes less and less sense the more you think about what they were saying and what they were meaning to say. But hey, why not structure your dialogue around a joke. And the laughs don't stop there, we get a “men don't ask for directions” joke in the very next paragraph. Hardy-har-har.

They play the blame game but pause to talk about churros (because Spain) and how distracting eating them can be.

Caroline: Can I make a suggestion?

Simon: It is a lewd suggestion?

I feel like Clayton meant that to read “Is it” and not “It is” because then why would she have a question mark at the end?

Anyway...

The scandalous suggestion she makes is to use GPS and while Simon scoffs at first because “only pussies use GPS” Caroline is able to convince him with her feminine wiles. Yay, outmoded gender stereotypes!

Caroline talks about how they are taking it slow

He was wooing me. And I was letting him woo. I wanted the woo. I deserved the woo. I needed the wow that would surely follow the woo, but for now, the woo? It was whoa.”


It would be really funny if, when they finally do bang, it isn't as “wow” as she wants it to be. That won't happen, because this is a romance novel, but it would be hilarious.

Makes out happen.

“I sighed, the tiniest whimper...”

What is it with people using the word “whimper” during supposedly sexy scenes. It literally means “to cry with low, plaintive, broken sounds.” If one or both of your main couple is making low, plaintive, broken sounds during satisfying consensual sexy times, something is wrong. Nothing is wrong here though. Despite whimpers to the contrary, Caroline and Simon are having grand old make outs. Good for them.

Simon makes a crack about kissing jack 'o' lanterns because Caroline can't stop smiling and Caroline says

'We're in Spain, Simon. Grinning is implied'”

Clayton, that's not how the word “implied” works. If the grinning was “implied” then she wouldn't be literally grinning.


They get to the house they are renting in Nerja and watch the sun set over the Mediterranean Sea. I'm not going to put a lot of that here, because it's not necessary for this Let's Read, but I will give Clayton credit. It's a good scene, establishes the setting nicely and it's refreshing to have Simon and Caroline just existing near each other and not bantering non-stop.

They explore the house together, find the world's largest bed.

It was the bed to end all beds. It was the bed that all the little beds aspired to be when they grew up. It was bed heaven. […] I had a lovely case of performance anxiety”

But you said you were letting him woo you and that you wanted to take things slow. I guess I took that to meant that you wouldn't bone on this trip, but now I suppose what she meant was “We didn't bone last night, but we will probably bone soon.”

Caroline makes the decision to just let the chips fall where they may and not put any pressure on either to preform. Which I find mature to the point of questioning if this is in-line with her character, but I like it so who am I to complain?


Caroline name drops some fancy foods and they chat about their plans. They take a moonlit stroll down the beach and Caroline tells Simon she likes holding his hand.

Witty banter had its place, but sometimes, all you need is the truth.”

Praise be! That has been my problem this whole book. It has way more style than substance and now that Clayton is actually giving me something substantial I couldn't be happier. This is still not my favorite, but this isn't as much of a chore to get through. It's weirdly nice.

Simon talks about how his parents truly loved each other and how false it always felt when he saw other people hold hands and say sweet-nothings. I want to be offended because me and my SO always call each other by pet names and are (according to others) disgustingly saccharine, but I will accept his complaint as that of a young man wounded. Besides, the overall, effect is nice because we see Simon vulnerable.


Caroline and Simon have decided to sleep in separate beds, but make out on Caroline's bed for good measure.

My shirt bunched up around my waist, and the feeling of his hi-there against my hoohah was indescribable.”

Hi-there? Hoohah? What is this? Porn by way of Sesame Street? No, actually, Jim Henson puppets have had way more graphic gigs than this.

He flipped me about like a rag doll...”

I know I just made the Jim Henson joke, but this seriously reminds me of the opening sketch from the old Muppet Show with Rita Moreno dancing/throwing the full size muppet around. Classic.

Anyway...

Simon pauses the make outs to say he doesn't want to mess this up and Caroline doesn't seem to get that he isn't talking about sex.

Simon: I have no experience with this.

Caroline: I have a wall back home that would disagree with that.

Why is Caroline so sex crazed? I'm not saying that she can't be, but I don't understand why everything equals sex with her. Baking = Sex. Traveling = Sex. Friends = Sex. E = MCSex. You think I'm joking but when Simon says

I really like you, Caroline. But I haven't had a girlfriend since high school, and I have no clue how to do this. But you need to know, that what I feel for you? Shit, it's just different, okay? And, whatever your wall would say back home, I need you to know that this? What we have, or will have? It's different, okay? You know that, right?”

Any sane, rational person would think that he is, more or less, making a love declaration. But Caroline thinks

He was telling me I was different, that I was no replacement for the harem.”


She is getting to the point of willful ignorance, and I'm just glad the chapter ends before this comic misunderstanding can go any further.

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